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Life inside your Coffee Can by =TEC-ThePenOfMerlin:iconTEC-ThePenOfMerlin:



I don't know what you meant by calling me your churchmouse, but I never was content with knotholes in heartpine or mozzarella cheese.  I never was content with dark and dusty corners, or with reverently whispered hallelujahs when Victorian sunbeams screamed in shock at your vulgarity and fainted on the floor of our chapel.

Andandand I never told you this,
but I'm living in your coffee can.


I've never been to a Baptist revival, but I've heard that, even two counties over, their songs are still as clear as the dewdrops on a spider's web--though your tongue was always the better weaver--or on the grass that's only as green as a bout of nausea.  But my heart would sing your praises as loudly if you'd only set it free.

Andandand each morning, for your cup,
you'd take my bed, replace the lid,
and leave me many sleepless days in
c-c-c-caffeinated--


Preachers and priests get to stand on their altars and shout their love to the floorboards and the rafters and row upon row upon row of men who just d-d-don't understand.  

--claustrophobia.

I
don't understand.  Do you?  Do you know what these scars symbolize?  Do you know what they mean?  Michelangelo got to paint his chapel with praise.  Solomon got to build his temple.  I don't.  I don'tdon'tdon'tdon't don't understand these scars.

Andandand I never told you this,
but I'm living in your coffee can.


Your tongue can weave webs across and around and over and over and over and sometimes I believe they're made of silk and that Diana was an infidel because of course pearls are made of saliva.  (It's then that I wish I had eight legs so maybe I wouldn't get tangled up.)  But sometimes they feel like fishing line and I forget how to breathe and I-I-I-I'm drowning in holy water because your Bible--your Bible makes garbage feel like home.

B-b-but I'm living in your coffee can.
There are no Bibles here.
:icontec-thepenofmerlin:

Author's Comments

Finished 24 May 2009...

...maybe. Because it is 2:25 AM and I am much too tired to catch all of my mistakes.

Comments are very much appreciated. I will abstain from babbling for the night. ^^;

Merlin

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:icontehmonkey:
You always post your deviations at like 2 in the morning xD
Youre worse than me!!
._.;;; that came out wrong. >>;

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Har Har Har Pirates :'D
:icononlyxxxsunshine:
a) i wish i had a favorites in my favorites so i could emphasize how beautiful this is.

b) my only critique is that you might want to find another way to say anything about the tongue, because i find the double entendre distracts from the piece. the piece doesn't feel as though it needs sexual innuendo or reference, so...yeah.

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shameless self-promotion. shameless.
:iconbellapotter:
. . .okay, I lied. If you tell me that you're not an amazing writer one more time, I will have a reason to punch you in the face. Seriously. You are fantastic; accept it already.

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doubt thou the stars are fire; doubt that the sun doth move; doubt truth to be a liar, but never doubt i love.---'hamlet', act 2, scene 2; william shakespeare
:icontec-thepenofmerlin:
a) I. <3. You. :glomp: You are much too kind.

b) I tweaked it a bit at the end again. Better?

Merlin

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"See the lightning in your eyes?"

You're Gonna Go Far, Kid, The Offspring
:iconphosphorene:
Your poetry/prose lately all seems to have a similar them, yet each one is wonderfully unique and draws you into a different world...
Keep going with this, it gives me more things to enjoy reading!!

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"You desire and do not take;
You love and you are too afraid to feel your love;
You are afraid to look inside your soul and see what you are.
That is why you are a liar."

--Arkan, Winterking (Alison Croggon's Pellinor series)
:icontec-thepenofmerlin:
I do seem to do that rather frequently, don't I? Heheheh... I'm just nocturnal. ^^;

Merlin

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"See the lightning in your eyes?"

You're Gonna Go Far, Kid, The Offspring
:icontehmonkey:
I do enjoy staying up late, but every time,like the day after, I feel like crap.

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Har Har Har Pirates :'D
:icontec-thepenofmerlin:
Indeed, there is a recurring theme... I'm actually starting to get a bit annoyed with myself. Just the same, I'm really glad that you liked it! ^^;

Merlin

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"See the lightning in your eyes?"

You're Gonna Go Far, Kid, The Offspring
:icontec-thepenofmerlin:
B-b-but... but... v.v

:lol:

Merlin

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"See the lightning in your eyes?"

You're Gonna Go Far, Kid, The Offspring

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